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Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle, or should people make their own decisions?

#governments #decisions #people #lifestyle
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As a result
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 of a pluralistic
society
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, there are manifold forms of
lifestyles
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 in a country. Some
people
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 argue that the
government
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 should restrict
people
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's behaviours and form a certain kind of lifestyle as the norm, while others believe that they should have the
right
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 to choose the way they live. In my opinion, in a democratic
society
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 citizens should have the
right
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 to live according to their preferences, and
this
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 cannot be controlled by the
government
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. It has been widely acknowledged that individuals should have the
right
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 to choose their
lifestyles
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.
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 is because that the salient purpose of forming a
government
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 is to deal with domestic public problems or global issues, which are hard to achieve by individuals, but not to limit
people
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's ways of living.
Although
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 few personal actions that may put a premium on inadequate cultures must be constrained by the authorities concerned, the way that
people
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 live should be decided by themselves according to their wills.
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, it behoves the
government
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 to act like an assistant
instead
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 of a decision-maker in terms of personal custom. There are several ways that the
government
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 can do to help
people
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 enjoy their own
lifestyles
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, and one of which is that the
government
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 can support
people
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 with similar tastes in organising big events.
For example
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, Taiwan is home to Asia's largest gay pride parade, while eminently unacceptable in the past, and
this
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 should be attributed to the open-minded
government
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 that values the diversity of
society
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 the most. In conclusion, while it is true that some bad behaviours should be regulated and banned, overall
society
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 should be diversified and
people
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 must have the
right
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 to enjoy their own
lifestyles
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.
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