Some people think personal happiness is directly related to economic success, while others believe this depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Some
people
hold the opinion that there is a direct correlation between feeling happy and having well economic situation. However
, others opine that for measuring happiness the other factors should be taken into account. Both sides present logical arguments that will be elucidated and followed by my own take on the matter.
On the one hand, it is a common belief that money plays a vital role in everyone life
and when one is wealthy can feel delighted in his personal life
. To be more precise, people
who have well economic situation are faced with minimum difficulty and hindrance for accommodating their needs, since they are able to gain anything they want ranging from essential items such
as food, clothes, accommodation to unnecessary ones such
as seaside reside, luxury car. Therefore
, the more money individuals have, the more welfare they have in their lives.
On the other side, some people
place a premium on other elements when it comes to well-being. From their point of view, money alone does not bring fortune and the other factors such
as health situation, having a good and supportive family and a decent career are of great importance in this
regard. Simply put, people
for feeling pleasure during their lifetime need to have balance in not only quantity of life
but also
the quality of it. An obvious example of this
is a wealthy person
who got injured in a car accident and suffering from some disabilities; So this
person
never feels happy in his personal life
because his health had been put into jeopardy and despite the fact that he has successful person
economically, can not enjoy of his life
due to not having perfect health.
By the way of conclusion, I would tend to side with those supporting considering the other imperative elements for happiness measurement. It seems that feeling happy in personal life
depends on a set of factors which are fundamental as well as the definition of well-being is different from a person
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite