When new towns are planned , it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shoping centres. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

While planning new towns,some

people

argue to construct

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of

parks

and gyms rather than shopping

malls

. I, for one, believe that both

sports

facilities and shopping paradises are important for establishing a

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town

.

This

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disquisition

will delve deeper into the reasons supporting my perspective in the upcoming paragraphs. The belief that public

parks

and

sports

facilities should introduce in a

town

can be attributed to the fact that nowadays most

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the

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people

follow

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and hectic

lifestyle

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. Due to

this

, they completely ignore their health. If there will be playgrounds and

sports

club nearby their places, it is more likely that they will spend

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in

such

activities which helps them to keep their body fit and fine.

For example

, in western countries like U.S.A and Canada, government spend huge money on developing public gardens and

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different exercise

equipments

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to encourage

people

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, which actually results in better health

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the residents of

area

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.

Therefore

, it is necessary to take

parks

and

sports

club

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clubs

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into priority while considering

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a new

town

.

Although

it cannot deny that public recreational grounds and games

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have

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proven beneficial for the local

people

, the importance of constructing shopping

malls

cannot be ignored.

Firstly

, shopping centres provide easy access to the

people

for buying any kind of stuff under one roof as they accommodate hundreds of stores of different brands and items in itself.

Secondly

, shopping plazas generate employment in a

town

. They provide

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of job opportunities to the

people

and help them in earning their livelihood.

For example

, shopping

malls

and big showrooms provide 5% of total employment even to

illetrate

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illiterate

illustrate

people

in Bengal by offering them jobs in

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sector

such

as helpers, drivers,

secruity

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security

and so on.

Besides

,shopping paradises

also

act as a symbol of royalty

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cities. The more, the number of lavish shopping

malls

, the more, the city is considered developed. To conclude, both

sports

facilities and shopping

malls

play

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indispensable role in establishing a

town

as

parks

and gyms help to attain good health whereas shopping centres provide easy access and employment for

people

.