The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides
There are controversial perspectives heating up a debate over the fact that the
growth
of low-cost airlines
has increased people's opportunities to go abroad. While
some argue that this
shows significant progress, the reverse suggests that it is often detrimental. This
essay's focus is on examining the issue from both perspectives, then
providing counterarguments. Correct word choice
and then
Although
this
viewpoint has advantages and disadvantages, it may be more advantageous than harmful.
Without a shadow of a doubt, the expansion of budget airlines
holds significance for the country's economy. The economy has benefited greatly from tourism, which has been greatly boosted by this
development. For instance
, in 2001, AirAsia began providing inexpensive international travel, which contributed to the growth
of Malaysia's tourism sector by drawing more both domestic and foreign travelers
. Change the spelling
travellers
As a result
, Malaysia has improved national
finances and successfully increased domestic tourism. Correct pronoun usage
its national
As a result
, this
increase benefits national budgets.
However
, there are some restrictions on the growth
of low-cost airlines
, particularly with regard to the environment. There is more air
pollution since each aircraft uses a lot of fuel and releases a lot of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere. In order to address this
issue, the government has mandated that airlines
pay certain fees in order to support programs that are meant to improve the quality of the air
. For instance
, Southwest Airlines
in the US has put comparable measures in place to reduce adverse environmental effects. Therefore
, even if budget airlines
exacerbate air
pollution, this
action effectively addresses environmental issues.
In summary, despite their contribution to air
pollution, low-cost airlines
have developed strategies to address this
problem and are vital to the country's economic growth
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coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between paragraphs for better flow.
task achievement
Develop your counterarguments a bit more to strengthen the balance of the essay.
task achievement
Provide a more detailed conclusion summarizing both sides before giving your final opinion.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear and relevant thesis statement at the beginning.
task achievement
Specific examples, such as AirAsia and Southwest Airlines, effectively support your points.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is mostly clear, allowing readers to follow the arguments.
Your opinion
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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?