Some people say that the main environment on problem for our time is to loss of particulare species of plans an animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

A group of people maintain that
lossing
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losing
a different sort of
animals
or plants is the main
issues
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issue
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in the environment that we are living in. While, some other of them believe that
another
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issues,
such
as
,
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air pollution are more important than
lossing
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losing
animals
. From my point of view,
although
there are too many important environmental problems, extinction of
animals
or some special types of plants is the main one.
To begin
with, animal and plant's
generation
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will be disappeared in the soon future.Whenever and wherever a type of animal disappears because of
the
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illness or hunting, it's the beginning of losing another sort of them.
This
circle will go on because they lose their food source and after a long time, when all of the
animals
died
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out, human's food will decrease until we have Nothing to eat and survive. So we might start hunting others
to
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we could just stay alive.
As a result
,
earth
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would be disappeared.
For example
, in
Iran
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,Iran
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after the
last
Iranian cheetah had died out, the number of snakes
which
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that
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feed and
then
decrease and it might fall either. Air pollution is
an
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another type of natural
issues
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issue
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. It has too many harmful effects not only on
humans
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life
,
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but
also
on the Ozon layer which is going to produce some other
difficalties
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difficulties
on global warming.
Firstly
, it injures
human
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body and health. it's the main reason
of
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skin cancer which might be really common and hurts too many people. Another reason is that
,
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it would
harms
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the health of
heart
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,
such
as
,
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springing heart attack.
Secondly
,
its
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torn
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the Ozon layer which is protecting us from the dangerous ray of the sun. So, if it completely breaks, our life would be as difficult as possible. In conclusion, most of the other problems would be solved by
government
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the government
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or even people but there would be no way for keeping all sorts of
animals
or plants alive.
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