Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some
people
believe that advertising has influenced
customers
to make decisions to purchase products, while another side of the
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argue that advertising will become too general, resulting in lacking
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attention from consumers. In
this
essay, both of these viewpoints will be discussed before reaching the conclusion. On the one hand, it is undeniable that many
people
are purchasing things because they saw them
from
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advertisement
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. Generally, several products and services are promoting their functions and features by buying
the
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air-time from
the
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popular TV shows.
Moreover
, the new brand products could draw
customers
' attention by making interesting
advertisement
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.
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cosmetic brand in Thailand, has announced its new soap by hiring a charming actress.
As a result
, so many women in Thailand bought
this
product, as they want to be like the actress.
On the other hand
, all companies are trying to present their
advertisement
. Currently, there
are
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a lot of
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to reach out
customers
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such
as sending messages, sending emails, using social media, etc. If the company send too much information,
people
will ignore it automatically.
For instance
, news and updates have been sent to consumers every day without interesting information. In my opinion, I believe that
people
still enjoy watching creative advertising, while it is crucial to target each
advertisement
to the right segmentation. One example is that companies send only one message to all clients.
However
, there is no
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.
Therefore
,
people
do not care about the
advertisement
if they get only irrelevant messages. In conclusion, both views are valid in some aspects. Advertising still plays a vital role for consumers.
Nonetheless
, the company should send the information based on
customers
'
personality
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.
Otherwise
, they will not pay attention to that
advertisement
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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