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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued by some individuals that for every criminal activity, there has to be a specific punishment while other
people
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 believe that circumstances and personal reasons during criminal activities, have to be considered while the decision is taken.
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 essay agrees that for every type of
crime
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, an exact penalty should be set. On one hand, some
people
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 believe that a person who has committed a
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 should be punished directly based on his
crime
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 level because if a guilty person is penalized based on certain punishment, he will not commit that
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 again.
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 essay believes that if governments were setting some radical punishments for different types of
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,
criminals
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 would know their acts' future consequences.
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, in Saudi Arabia, cutting one arm is the consequence of robbery. So, the stealing rate in there is too low.
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, others think that a guilty person would not be judged and punished based on what he was doing and his motivation and personal situation should be considered by judges.
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 are committing a
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 unintentionally for running away from being poor, the vast majority of them are decent in their normal life. So, setting an exact punishment like setting for real
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 is not fair.
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 essay disagrees that because if governments did not act radically in these cases, most real guilty
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 would learn how to escape from real punishments that they deserve.
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, in Switzerland, if someone robes from a store, they will not go to prison to understand their act's consequence,
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 they are being forced to work for NGOs'. In conclusion, some individuals believe radical laws to penalize
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 are essential,
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, some others believe that judges should consider criminal motivation and other circumstances. But, setting extreme rules not only would be more beneficial but
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 helps
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 to not commit a
crime
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 again.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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