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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.?

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The public, nowadays, is migrating to metropolises at a rapid rate, which has led the
people
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 to suffer from various hazardous issues that should be addressed by taking affirmative actions. Both causes of complication and appropriate solutions would be discussed in the following paragraphs. Most business ventures are established in cosmopolitan areas whereas
people
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 who are residing in villages have to commute to towns in
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 to do their duties and make the purchases.
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, if a person is living in a bourg and working as a programmer in the town in
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 to live from hand to mouth
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 he will definitely think to dwell in there
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 of a townlet.
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, he would be able to do shopping under one roof in the malls.
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, the population's shift to cities is because of improving living standards. It is a liability of the government to encourage the
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 who are involved in business to establish firms in the hamlets in
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 to prevent the villagers
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 migrating to towns including supermarkets so that
people
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 can obtain all sorts of amenities under one roof.
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 to
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,
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 kind of shift will improve the living standard of those.
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, the Information Technology ventures, set up in rural areas will provoke the programmers to reside in villages
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 of moving to cities. To conclude,
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, it is a good idea to reside in town due to facilities available there yet the establishing businesses in townlets is a relevant option in
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 case.
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, the higher authorities should pay heed to the villages in
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 to improve the lifestyle of villagers.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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