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Will see homeless people in the society, few people support them with food and money and few are against. What is your opinion on this.

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In many countries, some
people
 do not have accommodations to live in, so they have to stay on the road. They can still be alive because there are
people
 who give them food and
money
.
However
, there are
also
people
 who oppose
this
 kind of behaviour. In my opinion, we should not offer them anything since they can be a deceiver and if we are always helping them, they will not go look for a job and just beg us for some
money
 and food forever. To start with, There are many
people
 who deceive that they are poor or do not have a home to live in,
also
, these deceivers actually have
money
 or maybe some of them are richer than some
people
 who provide them with cash.
For example
, in my hometown, some
people
 pretend to be poor or have a disability like blind eyes, so they can get some
money
 from generous
people
. Another reason why I do not agree is that they will not go find some works to earn
money
 if
people
 often provide them everything they want. They will just wait for some
people
 to give them some
money
 and
then
 go to sleep and wait for tomorrow to come, and they will repeat their behaviour again.
For instance
, In Bangkok, I have seen the same beggars who ask for
money
 every day. To conclude,
people
 should not give them both
money
 and food because they may be
people
 who deceive us by their actions and it will make them think that they do not have to go to work anymore.
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