Many believe that it is important to protect all wild animals, while others think that it is important to protect some, not all of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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that the protection of wild
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should be selective. In my opinion, humanity has
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for all wild
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, though it is occasionally justified to divert resources towards more valuable
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. Those in
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of safeguarding certain wild
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argue the circumstantial factors. These factors can range from the threat the specific
animals
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face to the value of the animal itself.
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, tigers are an endangered wild animal and require intensive conservation efforts compared with
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such
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as rats and pigeons, which have adapted skillfully to urban environments. Most would admit that there is little logic in providing equal support to
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in different circumstances. A more extreme critic could add that some
animals
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are more deserving of preservation. The tiger, to continue the previous example, is greatly valued for its elegance. Other
animals
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,
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as bees, are valuable not for their beauty but
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usefulness to humanity.
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, all
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should be protected as humanity has been the catalyst for their endangerment. Before the rapid industrialization and surging populations of the
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several hundred years, humans and
animals
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lived on relatively equal terms and shared the Earth. Since human development has outpaced nature and now threatens the habitats of countless
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, it is a duty for mankind to enact safeguards for all
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. Without
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forward-looking protections, there is likely to be a “domino effect” as
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die out and impair fragile ecosystems globally.
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even if an animal is not on the verge of extinction, it might be important to maintain its population levels so as to not start a cycle of irreversible harm. In conclusion, humans should endeavour to protect as many
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as possible
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there are exceptional cases where some
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may be prioritized. Governments and individuals should collaborate to ensure wild
animals
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are not unduly threatened by human progress.
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task response
Ensure that the response directly addresses all parts of the task. Provide a clear opinion on the issue and ensure that the examples and views provided are balanced.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that the logical progression of ideas is maintained within paragraphs and throughout the essay. Use a variety of cohesive devices to link ideas.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • ecological balance
  • biodiversity
  • confinement
  • natural stimuli
  • psychological problems
  • genetic homogeneity
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