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Some people think that government should provide free education at every level. However, some say that individuals should pay for their university education. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Is it essential and important to provide a free educational system for all the students who are in the school or at the university? Some
people
 believe that the government must provide
education
 at each level out of tuition for all students.
However
, others say that those who want to have an educational system should pay an individual for that.
To begin
 with, in developed
countries
such
 as the United States of America or European
countries
, they have provided educational facilities for all of their
people
.
For instance
, they have provided public schools and universities for poor
people
 and private schools and universities for their wealthy
people
 that have numerous money to spend for their
education
 courses. Whereas, both of those educational systems have equal facilities for a majority of
people
.
In addition
, in developing
countries
such
 as some South American
countries
 or Asian
countries
, governments provide free
education
 for some students who do not have facilities, but they are clever and studious. The United Nations have emphasised governments for providing
education
 system for all of their
people
. In my opinion, free
education
 should be provided to a majority of children who are living on the Earth.
Moreover
, we have some difficulties in each
countries
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,
for example
, the war in the middle east or poverty in the African
countries
 or some problems stem from poverty or arise from lack of management in poor
countries
. To conclude
this
 essay, I think if some
people
 have free
education
 which is provided by their government at every level,
finally
, the progress of their country will be occurred in near future for them.
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