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A big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is argued that earning lots of money has more significance to people than being content in their
work
.
This
 essay totally disagrees with that statement. I believe that people are increasingly concerned about the risk of stress-related ill-health frequently experienced by people in highly paid positions and they care more about feeling fulfilled at
work
. Employees earning a large income are generally under significant mental and emotional pressure to perform well and achieve targets.
This
 causes many individuals to suffer high levels of stress which can result in both mental and physical health problems.
This
 happened to my uncle. He used to boast about his huge
salary but
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salary, but
 the boss kept increasing his sales targets and in the end, the stress became too great and he had a nervous breakdown. Now he regrets being driven by the money. Having a job that they
doing
Suggestion
do
are doing
, and in which they feel valued, is a major concern for most of the modern workforce. A significant number of people are giving up well-paid positions to do jobs which
pays
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pay
are paid
less but
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less, but
 that they find more enjoyable and less stressful. I am an example of
this
 myself. A year ago I left the teaching profession because the workload had become too great and I am now a gardener. I feel really fulfilled in
this
work
 and I am much more relaxed and happy even though I earn far less money. In conclusion, for a high percentage of the population, earning a substantial wage is less important than job satisfaction because of the negative effects of
work
-related stress and the desire to feel happy and fulfilled at
work
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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