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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the
last
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 decade, with the price of
computers
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 dropping rapidly, more and more families have purchased these devices for their
children
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. An opinion suggests that using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on
children
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. I totally agree with
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 opinion, and in
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 essay, I will explain the reasons.
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 of all, computer screens are bad for
teenagers
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' eyes. A study shows that
teenagers
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 who use
computers
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 for more than 1 hour a day are more likely to have myopia than those who do not. Scientists
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 found out that even watching a movie on a computer for an hour can have irreparable damage on human's eyes, especially
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'.
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 of all, the harmful content on the Internet may negatively influence
children
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's minds.
Children
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 can easily find violence, drugs, and sex-relevance content online. And there is nothing that can prevent them from viewing these contents. Because the
teenagers
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' minds are not fully developed, these harmful contents will even hurt their future lives.
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,
children
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 can become impatient after heavy use of
computers
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. A study shows that frequent fast feedback might lower people's tolerance of latency and become impatient. On the Internet,
teenagers
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 can get any information within a few seconds, making it unacceptable for them to do studies or research, which might take months or even years. In conclusion,
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computers
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 can have some positive effects on
children
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, negative factors like eye damages, harmful content, and the loss of patience will offset all the goods and make the lives of
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 generation worse.
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