Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while other think that people have become more independent.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Modernity

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world

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decades and with

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society's have transformed.

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weaker, resulting in more independent persons. Along with

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changes in relationship

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, technology

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stronger causing effects in

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interrelations.

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, is important to mention that some decades before

families

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around the

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were bigger, making

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conection

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connection

between individuals stronger because

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were more band together, sharing same interests, routines, place of living and jobs.

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families

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usually have

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kids and their housing belong related to their jobs making

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apart. According to a Harvard study, since 2000 it was

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that

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have many members living abroad or in a different city from their parents,

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kind of distance develop on

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autonomy and independence.

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, is impossible to

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avoid

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that technological growth

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parted society's, because

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innovation

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connections with

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all around the

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, consuming the attention that at

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fist

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was given to a local place and now it is focused globally, making individuals apart because of their interests.

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, there are some

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that disagree with it and support that

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had

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more dependency between persons, claiming that

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society

societies

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more globalized,

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they are more linked between them at economic, political and cultural issues. A clear example is the actual

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the performance of economy between

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countries

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China economy. Making

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country conditional on what happens on the other side of the

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hilghligting

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highlighting

different point of

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on the evolution of dependency in relations, I consider that

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definitely

modernity

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have

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made

people

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independant

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independent

as how it was decades ago. Making

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and groups apart, caused at

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because of the technology innovations we have had.

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalization
technological advancements
collective action
digital evolution
minimal reliance
direct interaction
empowered
access to technology
societal expectations
personal choice
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