Some people think that music plays an important role in society other think it is simply a form of entertainment discuss both views and give your opinion.

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is the most famous means of
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music
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duty in
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believe it is merely
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of entertainment.in my opinion
music
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thus
analyse both views along with my opinion. To commence with,the
people
, who believe
tune
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impact in
society
they are more traditional and they
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to
music
as part of their life.
Although
, in the
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modern
society
tune
can able to aware to the
people
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modern
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voice.
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of social
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would make awareness by singing songs with
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way of
music
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,
people
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by
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way and
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form of
music
puts
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society
.
In addition
, the majority, who believe
music
is nothing but entertainment there are many
tune
elements over the world which is widely countable.
People
, who are young age the always get pleasure by listening to
music
.
For instance
, the nagor
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value
, which is
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rock
music
brand in
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and
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vogal
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of
this
brand is
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eyewitness of live
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below 30 years of age.
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would say is the most common elements of recreation To sum up,If
music
can take over
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acceptability
in
society
obviously, it is come up with natural
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changes however
, in my point of view as recreational activities
music
has great appeal to
people
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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