Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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carried bad impact on individuals levels. I agree as social

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watch today on their mobile phones. The main problem is

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individualist and superficial world.

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increased depression and anxiety in

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to social

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in the future they could have anxiety

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or depression been a big issue.

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that we are now more individualist than decades ago. As consequence, we have a superficial world and it can be seen

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their social

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means that young

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do not speak or pay attention in

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social relations.

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generating a social issue. In conclusion, I agree that social

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in our daily routine.

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may rise to society level and might be a global

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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erosion
face-to-face
interactions
privacy concerns
data breaches
misinformation
polarize
cyberbullying
online harassment
procrastination
productivity
social isolation
dissemination
breeding ground
vast amounts
personal information
mental health

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