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Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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A large number of
prisoners
 who serve their
first
 punishment be caught again because of crimes.
This
 essay will present the main reasons and solutions to address
this
 issue. These are some social and economic causes that lead to the
second
 punishment of offenders. From society,
people
 usually have bad perspectives with
prisoners
 and tend to avoid them.
For example
, many parents restrict their children in re
lationship w
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a relationship
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ith a person who committed a crime.
As a result
,
prisoners
 are co
ntinous t
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continuous
o
c
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in
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o
mpany w
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a company
the company
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ith bad
people
 and would make repeat mistakes.
Furthermore
, offenders in fact have fewer opportunities to get a job after serving because employers have double opinions about them like their tr
urthless,
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ruthless
truthless
their work abilities ,etc.
Therefore
, th
ey w
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it
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ould be difficult to find a position in the labour market and maybe they would steal to expense their needs. Both government and community could tackle
this
 problem by the below measures.
Firstly
, po
licitians c
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politicians
ould run a campaign about the reasons why
people
 should not avoid the
prisoners
 in the area and
also
 teach the way to treat wi
th th
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apply
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em. If br
eaklawers a
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bricklayers
re gotten a little sympathy, they will properly have a normal life.
Secondly
, it is important to ensure offenders may have an equal chance to find a new job which can help them to decrease their financial burden.
Finally
, go
vernment s
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the government
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hould supervise them and give supports if they ne
ed.
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itneed
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 In conclusion, the fact is that many
people
 are committed
se
cond c
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a second
the second
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r
ime,
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crimes
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both government and society should implement the methods to tackle
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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