Shopping habits depend more on your age group than anything else. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals believe that when it comes to buying
habits
,
age
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group matters the most.
This
essay strongly disagrees with the opinion as there are other key
factors
,
such
as education and level of finance, which affects a person’s purchasing
habit
more than their
age
. One of the most influential
factors
that determine shopping
habits
other than
age
group, is education. A person could develop a
habit
of overspending
money
or using it responsibly regardless of their
age
. It is actually how they have been educated since they were a kid that matters.
For example
, many prosperous families overindulge their kids, giving them
money
to spend freely without supervising them properly.
This
results in their bad
habit
of splurging on luxurious, yet unnecessary items.
In contrast
, some other children are well aware of spending
money
wisely and effectively. Those children tend to be educated strictly
from
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their parents, and
this
develops their good spending
habits
. Another key reason with regard to purchasing
habits
is the level of one’s wealth.
In other words
, people who live on a budget tend to spend more sparingly while those who make a killing are able to splurge on expensive items much more often.
For example
, in many developing countries, people are big on buying clearance items as they are significantly cheaper than ordinary products. For the most part, people in these countries have a
habit
of making the most of their
money
while in other wealthy countries,
this
trend is not as necessary. In summary,
although
age
group is one of the most influential
factors
when it comes to shopping
habits
, it is certainly not the most deciding factor. Other
factors
including education and wealth should
also
be taken into account.
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