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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A number of games are offered to the
kids
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 by several guardians.
This
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 essay clarifies the advantages
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 as introducing the young to the animal kingdom and enhancing their understanding of the world.
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, age-inappropriate
models
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 can scare young people and choking hazards are really common in real life. To initiate with,
youngsters
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 need to be introduced to their surroundings through knickknacks.
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,
models
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 can be a useful item as it assists them to know of the world and its inhabitants, which may contribute to their learning at school.
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, it is vital for caretakers of the young people to teach them about animals and their threats to the
kids
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 by
models
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, which assists
youngsters
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 to remind these animals and their lifestyles in case toys are automated. The Bangladesh Primary School Association,
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, have completed a recent survey, which indicates that the
kids
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 who are introduced to numerous
models
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 are performing well compared to the other
youngsters
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.
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, age-inappropriate figures may scare the young especially automated
models
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, which could be more harmful than learning ;
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, guardians must choose toddlers’ knickknacks carefully.
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, choking hazards existence depend on the size of
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 as children have the habit to eat everything in their hands, which could
inresult
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result
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 the stomach issues due to the consumption of dirt on toys. In Bangladesh,
for instance
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, 80% of
the
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toddlers
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 stomach issues are related to dirt from
models
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, according to medical experts. To conclude, young people’s games ought to enhance their knowledge of the world and its surroundings.
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, automation of games, which scare
youngsters
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 and choking hazards to the
kids
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 must be carefully considered prior to
handing
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 any toys.

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