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Some countries import a large amount of food from other parts of the world. To what extent is this a positive or negative trend?

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 of creating their own cuisine commodities, governments throughout the world are increasingly dependent on feed imported from other public. It is, in my opinion, a dangerous trend that will have a detrimental influence on the agricultural sectors of society. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain my thoughts in detail. The disadvantage of depending on imported commodities rather than indigenous goods is that all local farmers in the nation who rely on crop sales would see a significant drop, lowering their living conditions.
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, agricultural workers may need to seek alternative employment opportunities.
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, during times of crisis, nations that import products on a large scale will stop doing so, causing another region that buys these items to suffer greatly.
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, the imported fare is not necessarily nutritious. To preserve the foodstuff while it is transported to other parts of the world, specific chemicals are added to it. These preservatives have been linked to the development of deadly illnesses
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 as cancer.
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, failing to maintain storage facilities results in significant bread waste.
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, people have to spend a huge amount on a foreign state in trade, and imported snack is overpriced. It
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 has a negative impact on the nations' native cultures. In Japan,
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, where imported meals are growing more popular, people's knowledge of their own indigenous cuisines is dwindling.
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, in a way, it might
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 be true that importing goods can provide access to some foods that would
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 be unavailable in certain land. Preserved foods kept for extended periods,
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, can induce a range of illnesses. To summarise, imports are not always beneficial, and they have a negative influence on the country's agriculture sector, weakening the country's economic position.
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