Some people think that it is beneficial for children to do paid work, while others think that it can be harmful for children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children doing paid work?

In recent years, the number of

children

who get involved in paid

work

has significantly improved. [Background sentence] While some people think that it is advantageous for them in many ways, others are of the opinion that

this

can bring out a set of concerns. [paraphrase]

To begin

with, one benefit of doing paid

work

is that

this

enables

children

to boost their employability.

This

is because when they take part in jobs, they not only learn necessary practical

skills

such

as computer

skills

, but they

also

acquire certain social

skills

such

as managing customers. It is often seen that employers, nowadays, look for

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candidates who have both practical

skills

and good academic qualifications.

Besides

, when they

work

hard, they can understand the value of

money

and learn important

money

management

skills

because they realize that

money

does not come without putting

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effort.

Therefore

, they don’t spend

money

on unnecessary items whereas their peers not doing any

work

possess items that they use very rarely.

However

, paid

work

can

also

cause some problems for

children

.

Firstly

, their main duty is to study hard and prepare for the future, but if they somehow focus on

money

too much, their academic results can be affected. If

this

happened, the effects could turn out to be very destructive for their career because

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a poor result, they will not be able to

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at a top university in their country. Another negative outcome is that they might be negatively affected by their colleagues.

Children

are always vulnerable, and they prefer to follow adults, so if the adults in their workplace have some bad habits like drug addiction or even smoking, there is a risk that they can copy them. To sum up, despite the advantages of

children

doing paid

work

, it is important to consider its drawbacks

otherwise

our beloved

children

might lose their career path as there is a chance of making poor academic results and getting involved in anti-social

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.