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Some people believe that a person’s culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People
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 have different views about the impact of birthplace on their
culture
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. While some
people
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 think that the
country
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 of
origin
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 would have an effect on a person’s
culture
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, others are of the opinion that it has little impact. I agree with the latter statement as I believe that there are other factors that influence more on our
culture
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. On the one hand, the birthplace would have impacts on some aspects of a person’s believes and traditions. When an individual is born in a
country
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, some of their characteristics are created. Language is one of the examples that children were not able to select from an early age. Indeed, the mother tongue is determined by their
country
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 of
origin
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. Religion is another example that cannot be selected by
people
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 in their childhood.
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, an adult girl who was born and grown in an Islamic community has to cover her head in public places.
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, the
country
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 of
origin
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 might influence a person’s
culture
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 to a great extent.
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, the society that someone lives in would have more impacts on their
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.
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, the regulations of society would affect an individual’s behaviour.
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, a woman who has to wear hijabs would be able to wear clothes freely if she lives in another
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.
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, the local customs would be an influential factor as well.
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, if a person migrates to the Netherland, riding a bicycle would be their main transportation vehicle to commute to work.
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, the
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’s lifestyle could
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 be altered in the exposure to the new environment. In
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 cases, they might tend to consume more or less healthy foods. In conclusion,
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 the
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 of
people
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 is affected by their
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 of
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, it seems to me that their living places have more impact on it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural norms
  • Values
  • Traditions
  • Practices
  • Festivities
  • Cuisine
  • Language
  • Religion
  • Beliefs
  • Social systems
  • Institutions
  • Globalization
  • Media influence
  • Multicultural societies
  • Migration
  • Personal choices
  • Experiences
  • Education
  • Knowledge exchange
  • Economic factors
  • Homogenized
  • Cultural identity
  • Geographically concentrated
  • Individualism
  • Collectivism
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