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chools should stop using books for teaching children as they find them.boring and use films tv and computer instead . to what extent do you agree and disagree?

#chools #books #children #films #tv #computer
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 essay, I will be touching on a few different views of mine on whether or not schools should stop using
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 for teaching
children
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 as they might find them boring and
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 use films,tv and computer, and ,
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 give my opinion on it.
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 with, I think
books
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 are a really good source of information, distraction-free and can be made fun as well by including illustrations or diagrams.
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, using
books
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 can be boring as well especially if they're not well presented since we know usually
children
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 are better visual learners.
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,
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 can be outdated in context with current scenarios I recall I've always been a huge fan of coloured
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 and comics as a teenager, which kept my interest in them and had no urge to pick up school textbooks over them. So, using tv, films and computers can serve the purpose of making teaching a bit more indulging.
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, schools could use animated videos or PowerPoint presentations to make things exciting in the classroom for
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 who would
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 not pay attention to
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. But at the same time, these methods can
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 be distracting to kids they tend to steer away from the key objective. I recall growing up television meant video games to me, if done under the supervision of the elderly or teachers though,
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 can be mitigated. As a final conclusion, I believe
books
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 have their place when you want all the important references in one place as things could become jarring if
children
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 or teachers had to search everything on the internet yet using films , tv and computer alongside them will be more stimulating and help to make things more clear. There are some public schools that have adopted
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 method of teaching as it is proven to be more effective.
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