Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea ora waste of time?

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University
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is one of the important
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in
education
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system of all the countries in the world. Nowadays, lots of
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student
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decided to spend
1 year
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gap before studying
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the
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university
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in order to pay a
vist
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visit
to other countries or obtain more
experiences
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experience
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for work . In my
oppinion
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,
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is absolutely a great idea and in
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i
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will explain why .
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of all, travelling can help
students
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broaden their
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in many new environments before they attend
university
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.
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, Asian
students
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who come to American for
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visiting
or relaxing can approach many new
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, they observe foreigner’s
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actions
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and
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when dealing with things. Because of
that
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they imply into their daily life,
unversity
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university
after that
wont
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be
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a difficult task for gap year
student
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.
Beside
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students
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have to study at least one language during their
traveling
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travelling
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time,
it
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which
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build up their
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and
diplomatical
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diplomatic
skill .
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, many
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student
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students
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spend
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who spend
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a year
to work
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also
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shown that they are more potential in their future jobs. Whatever it is a part-time or a full-time job,
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student
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students
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will gain more experience
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as in dealing with customers, coordinators, coworkers.
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, if they sell coffee they will know how coffee drinks are made, how to serve the customer and which attitudes should they give to others.
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, in some
jobs
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it
also
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has certain confirmations to put in your CV and from
there after
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university
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they will have more opportunities cause most of the interviewer’s requirement is experiences. In conclusion, it is a good idea for many
students
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to spend
1-year
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a 1-year
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gap
instead
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of
study
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studying
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directly at the
university
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after high school because it not only opens their
mind
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minds
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to new cultures, builds their language skills but
also
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gives them more experiences to support their career path.
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