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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school?

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In today's competitive world most of the
parents
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 expecting from their
children
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 to perform better in the class as well as in all school's activities which,
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, put a lot of pressure on
children
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. Whereas, there are
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 other
children
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, who do not get any appreciation from their
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 and feel less enthusiastic. In my opinion,
parents
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 should encourage their
children
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, but they should not put pressure to perform well.
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, at school, some
kids
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 perform very well in different activities or in exams, despite that, they do not get any attention or encouragement from their
parents
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.
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, their
parents
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, sometimes, get too busy in their professional life and
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, do not give proper time to their
kids
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.
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, their performance was affected.
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 to
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, some
parents
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 always expect their
children
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 to do best in the exams and other activities.
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, they keep on telling their
kids
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 that they have to perform well in the upcoming task and spend money on all those things required by their
kids
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 for that task. In
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 way, indirectly they are putting a lot of pressure on their child and
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 negatively affects his performance. In conclusion, as
parents
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,
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 is our responsibility to encourage, help and support our
children
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 in their success as well as in failure.
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, in the exams or any competition, one will to be at
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 place and remaining are in the following places, but we should always praise their efforts and hard work.
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