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«In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in» What are the reasons for this? How can people research it?

#«in #countries #people #history #house #in» #research
Nowadays,
people
living
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live
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 in buildings which can be several
thousands
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thousand
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years
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of years
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. Our generation
live
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 after many significant and wondering events that can
happened
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happen
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 in our houses. Human is a creature that interesting in
such
 things, so it is
predictable
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a predictable
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 situation when
community
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the community
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starts
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starting
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tostarting
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 research
it
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them
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.
First
 of all, it was caused by watching different films and tv shows. There is a common belief that from television
people
learning
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learn
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 about mystical and unrealistic things. Take
for example
, when somebody watches
film
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a film
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 about his town and hears about
strange
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the strange
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 and daunting situation he will immediately start finding any information about it.
This
 is mainly, because
of
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people
 that
under
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are under
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 the control of TV and
they
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believe in everything that they hear or see. At the same time, those who believe in it, starting their research. In
21st
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the 21st
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 century,
people
 have
a
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numerous
of
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opportunities to know about
history
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the history
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 of their place of living.
For instance
, somebody can find information from their relatives or from past owners of
house
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the house
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, frequently these
people
 will know
an unusual stories
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unusual stories
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 about construction.
In addition
, there is
a
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plenty
materials
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of materials
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in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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 which can tell you valuable facts. In conclusion,
this
 situation proves to us the considerable
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effect
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affect
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effect
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 on humans brain from getting information from watching
variety
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a variety
the variety
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 of materials on TV.
Nevertheless
, it is great that
people
interested
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are interested
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 in knowing the history of
place
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the place
a place
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 where they live.
Finally
, for looking for
this
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these
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 facts,
people
 have to spend a lot of their time and energy
for
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apply
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completing it.
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