In the modern world, people no longer need to use food or products from animals, such as medicine and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?

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For some time now, there are dual opinions that some people argue that serious crimes must be corrected by violent punishments while others have counter-argument that each felony has different effects so that each should be considered case-by-case. In

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essay, I will argue that serious punishments

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as judicial murders are more efficient to prevent violent crimes but it would

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make it entirely unethical. To commence with, there are two main reasons to substantiate my stance on

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notion.

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of all, the whole scenario must be well analyzed by juries about the motive and situation. Because sometimes the case scene might be misled by others and wrongly victims can get into trouble. If the punishment was taking one's life

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there would be no chance to seek justice by the victims.

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, there was an incident that happened in the USA where an African juvenile was wrongly accused of a false crime scene. They sent him to his demise.

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of the protest, later on, they found out that he was innocent and it was a consequence of racism. To add

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, I believe, the mere purpose of the extreme penalty is to deter a

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serious crime. Though it will efficient at a certain level, still there are numerous ways to reduce evil activities than

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kind of cruel punishment. One way to make

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process more efficient would be to have standardized outlaws for every single case but

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a life for a life would certainly not make sense. To conclude, from my perspective, violent punishment like execution has a few benefits

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obviously it has more disadvantages than merits.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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In the modern world, people no longer need to use food or products from animals, such as medicine and clothing. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Children usually want to play the same games and watch the same tv programs as their friends. Should Parents allow it or not? Give your opinion and examples from your experience.

Some think they can use as much fresh water as they want, but others say governments should limit water use because it is not endless. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The current trend in education is to move away from traditional exams and instead have continuous assignments over the school year. What do you think of this trend?