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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your hoetown that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your leter ．correct the information in the article ．explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information ．suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that an article in your magazine "Asian History" in December's version had some incorrect information.
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, there is a mistake on page twenty-seven, which says that "Tiger Dragon Temple" was built in 1895.
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, that was the
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 when the buildings started to be constructed, and 1990 was the
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 when they were finished.
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, the historical site is situated in the heart of Kaohsiung City, and page thirty
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 contains the wrong address, which should be the Zouying District, not the Nanzi District. It is important that you get the right
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 because the finished
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 was what we transit the meaningful event to our children.
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,
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 is one of the foremost historical sites in my country, and remaining accurate information indeed has an impact on memorizing the past.
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, providing the incorrect address may cause misunderstanding and inconvenience. Could you consider making the corrections in next month's magazine and on your official website? Sincerely Yours, Sherry Chang
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coherence cohesion
Ensure there is a clear logical structure throughout the letter. Consider using paragraphing to introduce, develop, and conclude each idea effectively.
coherence cohesion
Use an appropriate greeting and closing for the context of the letter. 'Sir or Madam' is formal and suitable, but consider using 'Editor' instead to address the role directly.
coherence cohesion
Maintain the structure of one main idea per paragraph to enhance readability and organization.
task achievement
Ensure your letter adequately addresses all parts of the task. The correct information, the importance of accuracy, and suggestions for resolution were all covered.
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Match your writing tone to the intended recipient and purpose of the letter. The formal tone used was appropriate for writing to a magazine editor.
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