Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, the advance of technology allows
people
to study and do
the
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scientific
research
in all aspects of
business
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the business
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and
academic
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the academic
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world.
Accordingly
, the
research
can be freely published
in
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many kinds of
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the platform
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platform
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platforms
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today
unlike
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the
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past.
Additionally
, some
people
believe that it is beneficial to the
people
to share the
information
freely while some
people
argue that the
information
should be limited to
certain
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a certain
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group
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groups
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of
people
.
Following
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paragraph will be described both attitudes. It is undeniable that with today technology,
people
can access a lot of
information
through the internet whether it is relevant to their business or the general topic. It is specifically beneficial to
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generation to learn the topic that they are interested
.
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Also
, if they see that the topic
is already existed
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in the world, they can learn from it and explore another area that
it
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has not yet been studied.
This
way can shorten the time to do
research
since
people
can study from available resources. It results in there will be many available
researches
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types of research
pieces of research
kinds of research
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and published in many different areas of study.
However
, it has some
drawback
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drawbacks
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as well.
First
, some studies contain sensitive
information
which should not be shared
to
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public
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the public
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.
For example
, medicine or health
research
should be limited to
educate
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to medical students or relevant
person
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people
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.
Second
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is that there are some
people
who intend to copy work of the others, and free sharing
information
will encourage them to copy
research
easily. In conclusion, I personally believe that there are both benefits and drawbacks to
share
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sharing
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as much
as
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information
as possible in the present time because there are both
people
who have good
intention
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intentions
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to use the available
research
in
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a good
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good
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way and the
one
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ones
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who do not properly use the available resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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