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Nowadays some people prefer staying single. What is your opinion?

#people
Many
folk
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 opine that living alone has huge benefits while
others
 think
otherwise
 . Having a healthy and sound heart depends on a
person
's status and success not on ones living status. As human
beings
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 public can't live alone because it may cause
of
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many detriments.Though there have some advantages of living single,
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 outweigh them. The following paragraphs are going to provide an overview of why relationships are required to lead a pleasant growth. 
To begin
 with, human has a
life
 circle
that is
 not for an extensive period. In
one
 entire
life
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 they should fulfil their responsibilities to their inheritance as well as every successful man has at least a
person
 behind
him
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 whose motivation inspired him to get success. Every day we have to do numerous work , and without
others
 help it might be impossible sometimes.
For instance
, when we suffer from any disease , we definitely demand
others
 assistance.
Moreover
, to accomplish the responsibilities to family members everyone should have a good relationship with them. Single
life
 has no merriments, and being alone no
one
 can mobilize their
life
 in a flawless way. On other hand, a married
person
 may share their feelings with their partner ,
as a result
, they can lead a stress-free
life
.
Although
 the single public can get enough time for themselves,they can not resolve every problem on their own.
For example
, sometimes people alone can not make a perfect decision while by consulting with family members they could easily subjugate any situation.
Furthermore
, conceding a single
life
 may vandalize
one
's future because without attachment no
one
 can lead a
discipline
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disciplined
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 and progressive
life
.
In other words
, family members can show the right way as they are the very closest
person
 to
one
 another,
hence
, they can infuse their
life
 with love and affection. To recapitulate, living with
others
 help people to get a mesmerizing
life
 ,whereas , single living has a lot of throwbacks.
Nevertheless
, having good relation with the nearest
person
, neighbour,and relatives will bring happiness and ensure an ethical virtue . Living together strengthen the bonding and boosts
one
's condition financially .people can enhance their
next
 generation with a healthy married
life
.
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