“Prevention is better than cure”. Out of country’s health budget, a proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what do you extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some
people
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suggest that an amount of the nations health budget should be contributed more to spread
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and for preventing solutions rather than spending enough
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on cures. I vote against these notions to a large extent. My points can be seen in
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paragraphs. There are several reasons for my disagreement. The
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and foremost reason is that as in the past our ancestors use plant extracts and
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use ayurvedic medicines to cure certain types of
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.
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by doing that ,remedies some
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are cured,
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, in recent times various types of
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have detrimental effects on the human body ,
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, Heart-related
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, cancer, stroke these are very common nowadays. For curing of these,
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most all hospital needs special rooms like ICU and without any machines related that it is not possible to cure any
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.
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,that there must be requirements of enough amount of
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for
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types of
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. Some suggested that
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should be spent more on health education and prevention measures. By spreading
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to common
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and by doing some preventive measures like doing exercises and eat healthy food is not only the options for countries overall health.
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, these measures are not taken by so of the
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because they are very stubborn in their nature.
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, the
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name covid 19 around 50,00,000 lakhs of
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died in India. For treatment ,purposes it needs so many ventilators and even PPE Keat and sanitiser etc. In ,India there are not many facilities enough to control these dangerous
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. Government and even so many news channels spread
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to the
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and tell them to take precautions but because of their disgusting ,
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most of the
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have not taken any steps for them. In conclusion, I disagree with these notions because even if by spreading
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and solutions some layman's do not follow the general guidelines so on that purpose treatment is play a crucial role so that more
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should be spent on the cure.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative measures
  • health education
  • chronic diseases
  • infectious disease outbreaks
  • cost-effective
  • advanced illnesses
  • healthcare facilities
  • healthcare professionals
  • allocation of resources
  • quality of life
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • early detection
  • socioeconomic benefits
  • absenteeism
  • ethical obligation
  • public health outcomes
  • health budget
  • diverted
  • healthcare burden
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