“Prevention is better than cure”. Out of country’s health budget, a proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and prevention measures. To what do you extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays some
people
suggest that an amount of the nations health budget should be contributed more to spread
awareness
and for preventing solutions rather than spending enough
money
on cures. I vote against these notions to a large extent. My points can be seen in
further
paragraphs. There are several reasons for my disagreement. The
First
and foremost reason is that as in the past our ancestors use plant extracts and
also
use ayurvedic medicines to cure certain types of
disease
.
Also
by doing that ,remedies some
diseases
are cured,
however
, in recent times various types of
disease
have detrimental effects on the human body ,
for instance
, Heart-related
disease
, cancer, stroke these are very common nowadays. For curing of these,
diseases
most all hospital needs special rooms like ICU and without any machines related that it is not possible to cure any
disease
.
As a result
,that there must be requirements of enough amount of
money
for
such
types of
diseases
. Some suggested that
money
should be spent more on health education and prevention measures. By spreading
awareness
to common
people
and by doing some preventive measures like doing exercises and eat healthy food is not only the options for countries overall health.
Furthermore
, these measures are not taken by so of the
people
because they are very stubborn in their nature.
For example
, the
disease
name covid 19 around 50,00,000 lakhs of
people
died in India. For treatment ,purposes it needs so many ventilators and even PPE Keat and sanitiser etc. In ,India there are not many facilities enough to control these dangerous
diseases
. Government and even so many news channels spread
awareness
to the
people
and tell them to take precautions but because of their disgusting ,
nature
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most of the
people
have not taken any steps for them. In conclusion, I disagree with these notions because even if by spreading
awareness
and solutions some layman's do not follow the general guidelines so on that purpose treatment is play a crucial role so that more
money
should be spent on the cure.
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