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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

#museums #charge #admission #people
Museums
 are one of the best ways to augment general information.some
gallery
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 are totally free.having said that being free leads to considerably more positive effects. in
this
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 I will explore the pros and cons of paying
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the bill
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bill
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bills
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 for
museums
 and try to draw some  conclusions. I will start by looking at the advantages. one of the major plus points of being free for entrance is the fact that all caste of people,who are no different how much
money
 they earn,could see and enjoy a museum
also
 when something would be free,people more encourage to use it.
consequently
,people prioritize
museums
 for their leisure so
this
 phenomenon can lead to
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 general information about many subjects
such
 as history,culture,art and etc.
therefore
 it is so beneficial to society. Turning to the other side of the argument,despite the fact that it is appropriate to have a free
ticket
,it may not be suitable for
services
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 of
museums
.
i
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 mean
museums
 allocate their income for several works like hiring more guides,providing books and maps cleaning the place,creating a parking lot and buying something new.if you notice,you understand that a museum which has a
ticket
 is more extended and advanced.generally,in order to pay
money
 for a
ticket
,the quality of
museums
 are getting higher and higher.
this
 is a good and clever choice because you spend
money
 on your knowledge and your free time while you help
museums
 to work efficiently. To sum up,paying a bill for
museums
 has both advantages and disadvantages.if it would be free. it helps society while
museums
 couldn't give satisfying services. in my opinion, paying
money
 for
museums
 is much more helpful than being free.the government should consider that
ticket
 prices should be reasonable thereby everyone can afford it.
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  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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