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Many people think that the government should spend more money on providing faster and cheaper means of public transport. Some other think that there are other important factors to take into consideration like (petrol, cost and environment). Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Most of the governments of the world are spending more money on providing cheaper means of public transport whereas some of them are investing the same on others
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 as petrol, cost and environment. Before we get to the conclusion let's see the downsides and upsides of both.
Firstly
, in the current century, time is the most valuable thing.
Similarly
, many of the people are living in the poverty line too.
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, the India where crores of people are living in a poverty line and where the country is too much big, it will take
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faster and cheaper means of transportation to reach the corners for employment.
Secondly
, The idea of faster and cheaper public transport will lead to various environmental and fuel issues.
For instance
, the vehicle will use more fuel due to the lack of efficient engines.
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, it can emit various gases that are hazardous to the environment that can cause serious health issues in the long run. Considering both views, there seems that faster and cheaper means of public transportation are required in a country with
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