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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed. What is your opinion about this?

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In some
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 of the US, a “
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” has been imposed upon teenagers and they would not be able to go outdoors unless accompanied by an adult. Even though the teenager's freedom is undermined, I believe that imposing
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 is essential.
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, the readers must be made aware of the type of regions where the
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 has been imposed. It was imposed only in rural
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 and villages in the woods
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 and was not imposed in major cities. In the past, the young adults in these
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 have been attacked or killed by the cougars in the forest. As other plans failed and with the rise in the number of cougar sightings, the townsmen had decided to set up a
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 to prevent
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 horrid incidents from happening.
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Europe has helped them save many young adults lives. A peculiar aspect of
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 incident is that these cougars attack only the youth but not the adults or livestock. When a teenager is accompanied by an adult, these carnivores leave them alone.
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, these teenagers are allowed outdoors when they are accompanied by an adult.
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, these sightings and incidents take place only after 6 pm. The townsmen noticed that these cougars are inactive during the daytime and attack only at
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 particular time.
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 supports that the
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 in these regions is logical and has to be followed judicially. In conclusion, It is in the best interest of these teenagers that the
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 has been implemented in these
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. I trust that
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 is the best plan of action for the townsmen and villagers to safeguard their young folk in town.
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