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People are now living much longer lives than before and many feel we should remain in the workforce for longer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent times,
people
 are beginning to live to an older
age
 than before and
people
 feel they should retire at an older
age
, too. From my point of view, I disagree with
this
 view since
people
 who have worked for a long
time
 need to rest and spend more quality
time
 with their family.
To begin
 with, it is a common trend to start work from around the
age
 of 16 upwards.
This
 means that many
people
 will remain in employment for over 40 years or 4 decades.
This
 means that
people
 who have worked for
such
 a long
time
 could be physically tired as well as mentally drained - they may need an extended rest. It is
also
 true that working life can be limited in terms of hobbies and interests.
For example
, when
people
 retire they are often able to visit places around the world they have never been able to travel to before. Another reason to stop
people
 from working well into their senior years is to allow them to spend some real quality
time
 with their family and peers. Whilst in full-
time
 work, many
people
 sacrifice spending
time
 with their family to provide money and support financially
instead
. When
people
 retire they should be allowed to spend a lot of
time
 with their family, which they might not have done previously.
Furthermore
,
people
 who are retired can support their extended family by providing childcare for young families. There are many reasons that
people
 may need to stay in work into their later lives than others require.
However
, in conclusion, I believe that
people
 should be allowed to retire at a young
age
 to fully enjoy themselves and spend
time
 with their families.
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