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THE RECENT POPULARITY OF ONLINE SHOPPING WILL RESULT IN THE END OF HIGH STREET SHOPS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#popularity #street #shops
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In
this
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 era of technology, doing online shopping is a trend and necessity of
people
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. As
people
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 are becoming busy, shopping on the web is becoming popular, many individuals claim that because of
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,
shops
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 on streets are closing down. I do partially concur with the said statement, as buying things from the web is giving freedom of shopping on the other side street shopping providing an experience of feel and buy. I have described my points of view in the
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 paragraphs. To commence with, buying stuff from the internet is giving uncountable options to choose from.
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, there is a number of online deals available that help customers to get
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 at discounted prices.
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, Amazon.com always have
items
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 on sale which is generally a few dollars lesser than local
shops
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 in the city as online shopping website always buy
items
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 in more quantities.
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 to that, internet shopping gives flexibility and saves time to buy
items
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 as
people
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 can directly order through the phone application. On the other side, local
shops
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 have their own importance in buying goods.
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,
people
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 like to buy furniture from the Ikea store as they can feel
items
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 and
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 get buying decisions.
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, routine
items
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 of life
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 as tablecloths, wipes, mugs and many more are generally getting bought from the Dollar
stores
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such
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 as a
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Dollar
 in Canada.
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 shows that street
shops
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 have no risk of shutting down. Local
stores
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also
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 don't have any delivery time so consumers just go there and get products quickly. To conclude, nowadays
people
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 are fond of doing web shopping but it does not mitigate liking of buying from
stores
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. That means, local
stores
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 never going to close in future as both types of shopping have their cons and pros.
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