In some cultures, children are encouraged to compete against each other. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this approach?
There is no doubt that
children
are motivated to have a competition with each other in some cultures of many countries. This
phenomenon has several benefits and drawbacks which will be explained in this
essay.
Firstly
, one positive impact from competing environments is children
's creativity and skills are fully maximized. To begin
with, children
who get used to competing circumstances are automatically will try to give their best. Competing with each other would make them to
show their best version since plenty of praise and even presents will be achieved by their parents and teachers if they could be the best of the best. Change the verb form
apply
Furthermore
, in this
modern world, if they could be the winner of the competition in
the Change preposition
at
province level
or even Add a hyphen
province-level
in
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in-country
country
, their name and achievement will be displayed in the media. Take my friend as an example, she manages herself until the national level as an Olympic finalist. Add an article
the country
As a result
, tons of praise and gifts were gotten both from schools and families.
On the other hand
, serious mental health would have happened if children
are forced constantly from
both parents who probably be demanding and teachers who are more likely to want to push the limits of the students. Change preposition
by
As a result
, more and more children
are having mental health. For example
, South Korea experiences a huge number of students that commit suicide due to the massive competition between students. Moreover
, they are most likely do not have a social life as their lives are only about the study.
To sum up, a competitive environment could make every child be the best version of themselves, however
, if the pressure is given every time, it could affect their physio problems. Therefore
, there must be balance
between one and another.Add an article
a balance
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...