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More and more young people use the Internet to socialise. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

#people #internet #socialise #development
Over the
last
 two or three decades, people have been using the
internet
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socialise
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to
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others
 tremendously than ever before. Nowadays,
this
 is a quite
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 to around the
world
.
However
, I think
this
 is a positive
imporvement
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improvement
 than negative,
this
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in
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 briefly for the following reasons. On the one hand,
internet
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the internet
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 gives more benefits to us,
hence
, people
are used
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internet
 for communicating-purpose,
this
 is a cost-less communicating tool like social
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media
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medias
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media
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.
This
 type of tool can communicate to
others
 freely as well as can be communicated anywhere anyplace
to
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around
teh
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the
world
.
For example
, a recent report by the Times of India said that more than 95% of the
world
 population are using
socialmedias
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social media
social medias
 to around the
world
.
In addition
, in
the
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 pandemic situation folks can contact
to
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others
 by using the
internet
.
On the other hand
,
this
 can affect
neagtively
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negatively
 among society because today's
popualtion
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population
 do not like to talk face-to-face due to using technology. Many youngsters do not talk to their's family members
extremly
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extremely
 close because they like to
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creat
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the
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 close relationship
in
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Facebooks
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 or Whatsapp rather than direct talking.
For instance
, in America, youngsters only
prefers
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 to talk by
socialmedias
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social media
social medias
such
 as virtual talk. To conclude, technology gives
more
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us more
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 benefits to us. Folks
who
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 the youngsters like to contact to
others
 by using
internet
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the internet
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 because
this
 is a cost-less and anywhere, anyplace can communicate is
the
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 positive improvement. Adults
do
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who do
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 not like to talk face-to-face is
the
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 negative development.
Therefore
, I think
this
 is a positive development than
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negative
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.
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