You stayed with a local family when you participated in an exchange program in lreland. You returned to your home country in a hurry and found that you had forgotten to take your laptop. Writea letter to the family and thank them for their hospitality. Describe your computer and where it is,and ask the host to send it back to you.

I hope
this
letter finds you in good health. I am
writting
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writing
this
letter to say thank you for
such
a
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great hospitality
through out
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throughout
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my stay. I enjoyed
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it alot
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alot
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a lot
in
peacefull
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peaceful
manners. One more thing, I would like to tell you about my
laptop
which I bought from the town market
last
month . My
laptop
is black in colour,
512
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gb
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ram
along with
extended
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hard disk. Before
return
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to my home country, I was doing my
last
assignment in
TV
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lounge. After finished my work, I packed my
laptop
with all
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the accesories
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accesories
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accessories
in
laptop
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a laptop
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bag and
place
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them on
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the dinning
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dinning
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dining
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table . After getting ready, I was already 10 minutes late from my schedule. In a hurry, I forget to pick up my
laptop
bag from the table. when I reached my home country, it came
into
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my notice that my
laptop
was missing. I need my
laptop
to
accomplished
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my daily tasks. I request you to look after it and send it to my country as early as possible. I eagerly
looking
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forward to hearing from you. yours faithfully, ahtsham
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grammar
Double-check spelling and grammar to ensure the clarity of your writing. For instance, 'writing' is spelled incorrectly as 'writting,' and 'forget' should be 'forgot.'
structure
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas or paragraphs to improve the flow. This can enhance the logical structure of your letter.
task achievement
You have clearly mentioned the reason for writing and the description of the laptop, which fulfills the task requirements well.
writing tone
Your thanking and closing statements are polite and appropriately set the tone for the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • hospitality
  • exchange program
  • memorable experiences
  • grateful
  • brand
  • model
  • distinguishing features
  • exact location
  • practical value
  • shipping costs
  • send back
  • cover expenses
  • appreciate
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