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Nowadays people are stuggling with stress in their lives.There are many factors that cause this issue.However,there are certain soutions we we can offer to improve it.

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Stress
 is a major problem in the modern world. A variety of
etilogies
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etiologies
 contribute to harm mental health, including personal, occupational and social ones.
Although
 it is almost
imposible
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impossible
 to modify all of these causes, many of them can be avoided. In the following essay, we discuss the changes we are able to make to reduce
stress
 in
personal
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 life and
work place
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workplace
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. One of the most significant causes of anxiety is the lack of proper sleep.
Human
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body
need
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 some time to rest and rebuild its strength every day. If we don't spend enough time
to relax
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, our
body
 reacts with increasing hormones to consume the
last
 bit of
energey
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energy
 for daily life.
For instance
, the
body
 tries to use carbohydrates
instead
 of lipids as its source of energy.
This
 process
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 will make us feel more anxious and
stressful
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stressed
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. We can prevent
this
 by paying appropriate attention to our sleep
hygeine
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hygiene
.
Job related
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stress
 is another source of mental pressure
which
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that
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 can
also
 affect our performance.
Emplyers
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Employers
Employees
 can take steps to find out whether the working environment and the relationship between the workers
is
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are
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 causing
stress
of
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or
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 not. They can modify the situation by persuading the employees to keep a healthy work-life balance. For
exapmle
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example
, researches suggest that mandatory paid vacations can result in less burnout in the staff as well as
increase
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 in production. In conclusion, controlling
stress
 may be possible by different means
such
 as giving enough time to our
body
 to rest and keeping a good work-life balance.
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