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The world natural resources are being consumed at an ever-increased rate. What are the dangers of this situation? What should we do?

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Natural
resources
 of the world are being used too much at an alarming rate.
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situation
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 can cause a
lot
 of problems. Fortunately, we can have some initiatives to
adress
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address
this
 issue. There are some matters caused by the waste of natural
resources
.
To begin
 with, it will put
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human
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 at the risk of not having enough sources to run our life. As a matter of fact, most of are using vehicles run by petrol which is one of the most natural
resources
 being exploited too much.
Consequently
, if
this
 source decreased, we cannot commute as much as we want, which causes us a
lot
 of
inconvenience
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. In
tems
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terms
 of industry, without enough natural
resources
such
 as coal or oil, a
lot
 of factories cannot operate to produce goods.
Furthermore
, when we squander these
resources
, forests
in particular
,
as a
result
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 we will have to confront a
lot
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 natural disasters like storms or floods more frequently.
This
 situation not only has adverse effects on
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 but on
natural
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 habitat of
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animal
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animals
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 as well.
For example
, a
lot
 of trees are being cut down annually which leads to habitat loss or vast extinction of animals around the world.
Although
 preventing people from wasting natural
resources
 is
such
 a complex task, there are still some measures we can take to address it. One of the approaches is to use friendly
energy
 sources like solar
energy
instead
 of relying too much on natural
resources
.
This
energy
 supply is both environmentally friendly and affordable;
therefore
; we can reduce pressure on the
amount
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 of
resources
. Another strategy is that the authorities impose
heavier
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fine
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 on the action of exploiting natural
resources
 illegally. To be more specific, the government should enact more detailed laws about the
using
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 of natural
resources
 so people will know their limited consumption
to
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 natural
resources
. In conclusion, running out of natural
resources
 poses a devastating impact on both
life
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 of human beings and
environment
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. In order to
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this
 matter, it is necessary for all of us to have a priority to using solar
energy
 or be aware of the value of these natural
resources
 with the aim of having wiser choices for using these sources.
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