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The international committee should act immediately to ensure that all countries reduce fossil fuels such as gas and oil. Do you agree or disagree?

The environment has been a highly controversial issue for
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 two decades. It is often argued that an obligatory law should be imposed on the reduction of fossil fuels for all the nations around the world.
This
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 essay will discuss why I partly agree and disagree with
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 notion. To commence, on the one hand, there is no shadow of a doubt that industrialization and carbon dioxide emissions play a significant role in air pollution. Indeed, it is believed that there is a demand for new factories and industries to meet the needs of the local people, especially in megacities
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 as Tehran, Shanghai and Sydney , which inevitably leads to an unprecedented amount of fossil fuels emissions
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as carbon dioxide, gas and oil.
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this
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 massive production could evidently be highly profitable for the countries .So , it is highly likely that the in-charge government be reluctant to halt the process. Clearly, it is vital for the international federation to impose a lax on banning fossil fuel production.
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 all the individuals and lands are contributing to carbon footprint and posing environmental problems ,several developing ones tend not to be economically ready to take environmentally-friendly action in terms of gas and oil reduction including Iran and Afghanistan.
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, they are financially vulnerable and experiencing high inflammation as well as not being well-equipped enough and
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 mandatory rule may put abundant pressure on them.
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 they will fall behind other developed countries ,economically and eventually socially. In conclusion, even though the Earth is on the verge of extinction environmentally and an international implementation is urgent . I reaffirm my position on partially agreeing and disagreeing with
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 belief in favour of the poor countries and as a compulsory job for the rich ones.

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