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Playing team sports at school can teach students a number of lessons that are useful outside of sport. What values can students learn from playing team sports? How can they apply to these values in the future?

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It is an irrefutable fact that
team
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sports
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 play a major role in a student’s life.
Team
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games
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 offer a plethora of benefits to the
players
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.
Team
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sports
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 have pragmatic impacts in many ways.
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 and foremost, these
games
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 make the
players
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 adaptable and flexible according to their co-
players
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.
Secondly
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, these
games
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instill
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 the values of
teamwork
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 in a competitive environment.
The
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 vivid example of
this
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 is football, basketball, baseball.
First
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,
team
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sports
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 teach students/
team
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members
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 a plethora of values and lessons which can affect them positively. One lesson/value is
teamwork
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 which helps to accomplish goals with your peers more effectively and efficiently.
Teamwork
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 teaches to work towards a unified objective.
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,
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also
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 refers to finding the right people to trust to help the
team
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 achieve its goals. Needless to say, students who grow up playing
team
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sports
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 become excellent
players
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 at their workplace or
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 in general. Another lesson is competition. Competition propels
team
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members
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 to strive for their best performance and
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 all their potential. Competition unifies
team
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members
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 towards a common goal where
players
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 forget about their differences and focus on winning.
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, playing in school
sport
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 teams shapes the student’s character to be hardworking and determined. In order to get ready for
games
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, a student needs to practice and work hard to overcome his or her weaknesses. Since
team
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members
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 share responsibility for the success or failure of the
team
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, students have the motivation to work to their utmost and be
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strong
contributor
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 to the overall success of the
team
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. To cap it all,
team
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sports
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 play a crucial role in a student’s life by teaching important values and lessons that leave a mark for the rest of their lives. Since
team
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sports
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 improve
players
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