Environmental problems are serious in many countries. It means that the only possible way to protect the environment is at an international level. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, all the
countries
are facing serious environmental issues and people believe that can only be resolved
by
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internationally by giving little
efforts
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from all the
nations
. I completely agree with the
above given
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statement and the reasons will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, every
nations
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should be aware of the actual cause of the
environment
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issues.
International
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The international
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organization
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organizations
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should make strict rules and regulations which are followed by every
countries
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very strictly and
for
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those
do
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not follow
it
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should be penalized heavily. Every
countries
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country
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has many industrial areas,
firms
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, mills and factories where the production house is established which produce
huge
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number of goods and
materials
by using
variety
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of products and chemicals and due to these reasons environmental causes
happens
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. Manufacturing products
is
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good but maintaining industrial waste
materials
and chemical carrying out in proper ways is mandatory and
government
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the government
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should keep their observation over
this
very carefully.
Secondly
, All the developed and undeveloped
nations
should
be facilitate
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by the government to deal with the huge number of poisoned gases
carrying
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out by
the
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industrial production which spread in the atmosphere and damage the environment. Government should support financially
to
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the
nations
and
specially
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for
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the undeveloped
nations
and provide them
proper
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techniques and treatment to
minimized
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the cause of the issues and waste
materials
. Developed
nations
can easily invest in advanced systems and
mechanism
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mechanisms
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at the other side undeveloped
countries
cannot afford advanced
mechanism
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and international organizations should
kept
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their eye
over
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this
. In the conclusion, every country should come together and abide
the
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rules and regulations made by
the
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international organizations
also
carrying out industrial waster
materials
in a proper way can make
this
world
the
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better place to live in and
minimized
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the environmental causes.
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