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You and your family are moving to another country for work, and you are looking to buy a house there. Write a letter to a property agent. In your letter: Introduce yourself and your family Describe the type of accommodation that you hope to find Give your preference for the location of the accommodation

#country #work #house #property #agent #type #accommodation #hope #location
Dear sir/madam, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter to you regarding of buy a
house
 in Mildura. My name is June, I am a Malaysian Chinese, my parents and I are currently live in Malaysia.
However
, we are planning
immigate
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immigrate
immigrated
migrate
 to Australia for work in 2 months time. I am looking for a 3 bedroom home in Mildura, my mum love to
plan
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plant
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 vegetables so, the
house
need
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 to have a backyard, and If is it possible included a small garden at the front of the
house
 that will be great. For the internal, I
perfer
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prefer
 to have electric
air
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conditional
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 and heater,
also
 the bathroom must separate with the toilet. I have been
done
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 some research online and my friend
have
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 been giving me some advice.
Althought
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Although
, we love to live
closed
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 to the shops, but if the price is too expensive, we would have to stay out
from
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 the centre.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, a semi-detached
house
 or a freestanding
house
 or even just a unit
that
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will be fine for us as we are mainly
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the concern
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concern
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of
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about
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 the prices. Could you please send me some information and
attached
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 some pictures too. My email address, [email protected]. I look
farward
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forward
 to hearing from you. Thank you Yours sincerely June
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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