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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this approach.

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In
this
 modern era, the world rate in developing countries are tremendously increasing, some individuals advocate that
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 we should adopt
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genetically modified crops to raise the productivity of supplies. In
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 will examine some of the benefits of
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 plantation, and in
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 half and negative aspects will be discussed. I will start by looking at the advantages, one of the major
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 is surplus food
production
.
Hence
, not a single child or person suffers from starvation,
that is
 the basic need of every individual.
Moreover
,
this
 genetic engineering
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vegetation
 helps in
crop
production
 irrespective of climate changes.
For instance
,
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tropical fruits like mangos are usually present in the summer season but, due to
this
 advanced technology these unseasonable fruits are
also
 available in other seasons as well.
Additionally
, the GM method increases the productivity
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 20 times,
therefore
, the economy of the country
also
 increases because of export business.
Hence
, these genes
crop
production
 approach is extremely beneficial in many aspects.
On the other hand
,
this
 modern method of
crop
production
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 many drawbacks. One among them is lack of nutritional value. As
this
 genetic process uses pesticides and chemicals for rapid
crop
production
, the quality and healthy nutrients are reducing.
Thus
, creating health issues.
For example
, in India people faced some allergic reactions because of eating unseasonable foods.
Also
, the taste of
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 is not as good as compared to
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 grown
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. If we are shifting to
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 method of
production
,
then
, we must have to compromise on taste, nutritional value and so on. To conclude, there are both positive and negative aspects.
Inspite
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In spite
 of that, I personally believe that
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 engineers must bring the solution to maintain the quality along with modern technology.
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