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Band 4.5

Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons, examples to your answer.

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 the boundaries of the continents have melted, as a majority of the people are doing trades with each other regardless of their physical location. The developed one export new technologies to the developing regions, and the developing one, in turn, provide them with food items. There is always a debate around
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 how much
foodstuff
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food
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 should be produced by different nations and how much
need
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 to be imported. Some folks feel that states should produce the
foodstuff
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 that their population eats and limit
the
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imports. I denounce the said statement and will
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my opinion in the following paragraphs. The first supporting reason for my point of view is that many continents of the world are totally dependent on irrigation for their economies. If the consumption of the crops that they grow decreases, it will surely impact their growth
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 in some
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cases
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 they might even go bankrupt.
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, there are various states like India, Africa and some parts of Europe which export important food products like Rice,
Potato
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potatoes
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, sugar and coconut. Reducing
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import
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imports
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 by developing parts of the globe will have a negative implication on their future. The second argument for my viewpoint is that
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 the contrary, there are many developed countries that have excellent economies
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 they have limited land area for agriculture. It is practically impossible for them to grow food for their own area. There are many examples, like
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, Spain, Dubai
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 Switzerland are totally dependent on others for their basic necessities. If they start importing less
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 their social infrastructure will not be able to handle that situation
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 in the failure of the governments. In
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 nutshell, we can accumulate the fact that all the countries in the world are interdependent on each other and if any change is made in the basic nature of the import and
export
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then
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 it will drastically affect the trade circle which had been in place for centuries. So, to keep the machine
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running,
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 we should not interrupt the trade cycle.

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planning
Plan before you write. State your view up front and keep one main idea in each paragraph.
task response
Make your answer clear. Answer the task and add why and how you think this.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go with each other.
examples
Choose simple, true examples and keep facts right.
grammar
Use short, clear sentences. Avoid long run-on sentences and repeat words.
content
You show a clear view that trade between regions is important.
structure
The essay follows a plan of intro, body, and conclusion.
arguments
There are ideas that show you think about the topic.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-sufficiency
  • trade dependency
  • food security
  • sustainable agriculture
  • local economies
  • carbon footprint
  • supply chain
  • food miles
  • agricultural sector
  • domestic production
  • import substitution
  • food sovereignty
  • global supply chains
  • trade imbalances
  • food standards
  • economic resilience
  • biodiversity
  • cultural heritage
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