Some people believe that all children should have a pet or an animal to look after. Other people disagree, however, saying that this depends on a child’s circumstances. Consider these opposing views and give your own opinion

People have different views about whether
children
should own a
pet
or it only relies on the
circumistances
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circumstances
to look after a
pet
. While
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some people claim that taking care of a
pet
has many positive impacts on
children
, I believe that domestic animals should be owned under some specific conditions. On the one hand, There are a number of root reasons why some are of the opinion that looking after a
pet
will improve the
children
mentally.
Fristly
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Firstly
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,
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domestic animals like
dog
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dogs
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or
cat
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cats
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require responsibility from
children
, because, dogs and cats need
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regular feeding and playing games with
owner
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,
otherwise
they may become unhappy.
Secondly
, pets might be bought to get rid of loneliness.
For instance
, a child who does not have any other siblings will be alone, if his parents do office work and the household chores, and so,
this
pet
reduce
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the feeling of loneliness, while the parents are working.
On the other hand
, there are,
however
,
other
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who express doubts
on
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this
approach. Their suggestion is that there are many people
have
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an allergy
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animal hair, and if a person relapsed when
approach
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the
pet
, it would be unnecessary to keep a
pet
.
Moreover
, keeping
animal
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animals
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at home or garden needs many regular items and expenses to meet its requirements which can be
financial
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problem for
needy
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family
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families
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.
For instance
, keeping a cat has many regular and single expenses like food, rope for shortening nails, vaccines, and special comb which cannot be paid
by
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these families. In conclusion, after looking at these two opposing points of
views
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, it is felt that it is wrong to impose all
children
to keep
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a pet
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pet
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pets
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, owing to
the
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medical and financial reasons.
Therefore
, I strongly agree with the
poeple
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people
who are against the obligation of keeping a
pet
.
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