There have been some problems with the bus service, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In your letter • describe what the problems are • explain how these problems are affecting you • suggest what you would like the company to do You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ...........,

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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letter to express my deep concerns about the bus service that your company has been providing for the
last
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two weeks, and I am
also
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worried about the quality of the vehicle. I hope it will be dealt with utmost priority
after
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this
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letter. I currently reside in North York, and I have been using your transport for the
last
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two years to travel to distant locations.
Nevertheless
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, in the past two weeks, I have faced many service-related
issues
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, including poor customer handling and reckless driving by your employees. Since I am travelling on extended routes, I suffer from many health
issues
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whenever I finish a trip. The worst thing is that
this
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similar type of driving continued despite notifying them about the problems faced by the passengers.
For example
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, one of the passengers was severely injured after the instant brake was applied by the driver during one of the occasions. Given these
issues
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, I would recommend that the company take the necessary actions on the new drivers and implement a penalty for anyone who repeats
this
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in future.
Also
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, it will be very helpful if passengers get a separate helpline number to communicate these
issues
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immediately. I am eagerly looking forward to prompt action on
this
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matter. Yours sincerely, Pratheep Kumar

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task achievement
Try to add more details about how the unreliable service has affected your daily life.
coherence and cohesion
Use connecting words (like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally') to make the flow of ideas smoother in your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly covers one main idea. Consider separating the driving issues from the customer service issues.
writing tone
The letter has a polite tone, which is suitable for writing to a company.
task achievement
You clearly described the problems with the bus service, which helps the reader understand the issue.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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