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Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Earing immense
money
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 cannot provide
happiness
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. In my perspective,
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 statement is true because
happiness
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 depends on several
factors
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 except for richness. It is noticeable that these
factors
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 can variate in accordance with human priorities.
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, some of these
factors
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 can have equally significant meaning for the great majority of people, they will be discussed in
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 essay below. The list of
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, which may have a significant influence on
happiness
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, consists of
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, like health and mental condition, the relationship between family members, career perspectives, friendship, and richness. Mental or/and health diseases may cause a dramatically negative impact on human wellbeing. The family atmosphere has an important meaning too. If a person had some problem inside the family, he hardly ever would have the ability to achieve his vital purposes and be happy. Other mentioned aspects have an equal influence on
happiness
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. It is
undoubtable
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undoubtedly
 that having good friends or a great career can contribute to having a happy and healthy personal life.
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, according to research, 80% of people prefer to be happy, not to be rich. It is said, “If a problem could solve by
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, it would not be the problem”. It is deniable that wealth has an impact on human wellbeing,
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 solely wealth cannot guarantee
happiness
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.
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, Princess Diana’s life, which can serve as evidence of
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 statement. Princess Diana could be considered as one of the richest people in the world. It is well-known fact that she was not happy during her marriage life and all her
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 could not help her. Meanwhile, in some cases,
money
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 can help to solve some problems. So that, the true meaning of
money
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 cannot be reduced. At the same time, should not exaggerate
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 meaning too. In conclusion, it is clear from these observations, that all these mentioned aspects have a particular meaning on human
happiness
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. Considering richness only in
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 context cannot bring results, because its impact is not crucial. Meanwhile,
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factors
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 have a more significant influence on
happiness
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 than wealth.
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